The Real Ghostbusters: "Canis Mors."--Updated! 07/15/2010

You are correct about the familiarity of the way the Harbringer possesses It’s victim…it does bear many similarities to the Terror Dogs possession of Louis and Dana, which actually was intentional (not to copy it but to have similarities to) because we never actually got to see the posession itself, just the attack in the films. and I always wondered what did it look like…how do the terror dogs possess people …did i mention that the Harbringer and the other Guardians (oops hint dropped there…there may be more than two) are related to Terror Dogs in their class and type but much much more dangerous, both in intelligence and abilities but I can’t say more than that right now because it would be a huge spoiler..

If you could only see the writing i have done on these creatures and their history and back story…the backstory, information and history of the big baddie (who has yet to fully show himself) is about six pages long hand written. I may put it up to go with the story to, as a bonus. I would love to see some of the awesome artists on the boards try and capture this creatures and their master in images. I’ve tried but its no where near the quality of some of the work on here.

Hope that helps clear it up a bit.

Can’t wait to hear what you suggest! And again, thanks alot for being my one constant reader. ..its great to have a voice of reason to reign me in! :smiley:

PS

I suppose I could drop a little spoiler about the bad guy here…the title of the story is Canis Mors, which is rough latin for Dog of Death…as the association here is with jackals and wolves and dogs scavenging and eating the flesh of corpses…there is another reason for the title besides the obvious one..but if i tell it..it will ruin the plot… :slight_smile:

great work man i love it, but… when are you goint to finish exodus?

I never could get a reaction out of exodus but i do intend to finish it. Not sure when but I work on it from time to time. Not many people like the extreme ghostbusters but i do lol…another reason is Canis Mors may have an impact on Exodus as the events in Canis Mors happen years before Exodus and we (drops another hint) might get to see a certain really bad guy come back…

what did you think of exodus? I liked the story, but the thing is, really good commentary, ideas and critiqueing are hard to get because I dont follow the traditional fan established canon. Actually now that I think about it, I have my own canon and it sometimes runs against the grain of the “canon” already established and some people have a hard time with it.

See, i see the canon as progresing somewhat like this, with more authority given to the real ghostbusters and credit given to the XGB as well, not that mine is any better, just different.

Ghostbusters

Real Ghostbusters (five year span)

Ghostbusters 2

Real Ghostbusters

Ghostbusters The Video Game

Extreme Ghostbusters

I haven’t forgotten the NOW comics (remember early in Canis Mors, Peter’s poster of Lucious Linda that Frump broke?) or anything like that, i just consider them to be part of RGB lore and as for Ghostbusters The Return (excellent book!) it would have to be retconned a bit to happen just before GB the game and find a way to explain why winston is no longer the mayor…but believe me, ive got ideas just all filed away ready when i need em :slight_smile:

Since alot of people dislike XGB and dont consider RGB to be canon for the most part, my stories tend to be a new way of looking at things but i like it that way better because I truely love this franchise and its characters and its stories and how it brings people together and I want to do something to contribute. If Canis Mors goes well, then I will compelete Exodus and if those two do well enough, I have another project I would like to work on that I started a long time ago…which is novelizing the real ghostbusters episodes into “book” form…this would carry over into the XGB too…cant forget about them :slight_smile: I think my favorite episodes to novelize would be Rage, Home Is Where the Horror Is, Deadliners, Darkness at Noon, back in the saddle, and one where egon’s former colleague fakes his own death to enslave spirits..(forgot the title forgive me! its been a LONG day at work and prepping for a road trip tomorrow to an investigation in west tennessee)

Some of the changes I would make to my canon, would be to discount the Slimer-based episodes and the campier characters that were introduced and of course, i will ALWAYS keep Janine as she was in season 1, that fire brand, sarcastic, brave sexy secretary and of course, i would keep the love relationship between she and egon and might even consider throwing in Dana (i already have a plots in mind as to why she wasn’t in RGB), keeping peter’s personality as Lorenzo Music portrayed it and having less of Louis and keep Slimer as he was best as…as a slobbering green gluttonous mass!

After the game comes out, and I get to know the character of the rookie better, I plan on adding him into the RGB canon as well as well as the other guy that Ray mentioned as having worked for them for a short time before something really nasty happened to him… I already have his uniform and look sketched out as well as RGB versions of the game equipment upgrades but I wont do more with him until I know more about him…such as his name. For now, I think we are all calling him Ryan French because we dont have anything better to call him and Bob is just NOT going to cut the mustard… :slight_smile:

I experimented with The Grundel a while back and it went really well. I had it almost complete up until just before Egon figured out what the Grundel was. I’m not sure where I would start with that type of project or how much people would want to hang me but I think it would be fun to take the episodes, give them a new format, and then expand on them and remove the censoring that went into place for the kiddies but maintain the essential humor and equal parts terror that made the shows so lovable and memorable.

For now, I just watch and re-watch every episode i can get, research the series bibles that are available, read every now comic i can get my hands on, reading the original novels, scripts and cut scenes, pretty much everything.

Thank you so much for taking an interest in what I am trying to do. I really appreciate all you guys that read and comment, and I don’t often say much but I just wanted to say thanks and hope you guys (and gals) continue.

Thanks!!!

You know, if you like the cartoons, use them. I can’t stress that enough. Ignoring them because “other people don’t consider them canon”…well, that’s their loss. Don’t get hung up on what everyone else is doing–do what you want.

thank you, Fritz. I do sincerely love those shows and characters…even now, years and years later, I can still remember my favorite christmas, when i was probably five or six, and i got lots of odds and ends, but my favorite gifts were the proton packs and pke meters and traps we got. We spent years playing with them, my sister and I. I wish I still had them now because they were the source of so many happy memories, before the family fell apart and everyone got older and grew away from the things that make us human and give us joy.

I know it sounds like a load of tosh, but Ghostbusters for me is a passion and I will be taking your advice and wish me luck. It is not going to be easy lol. But, as long as I can make at least 1 person happy and relive a bit of their child hood, thats cool with me, even if its just for a little while.

Thats why I write. I don’t write for praise or to be the best or anything; i just enjoy creating and letting others experience it. Pity I cant build worth a snot otherwise i could contribute more to the community. I enjoy just browsing the boards and seeing the beautiful works of art people make, from props to artwork…truly inspiring. :slight_smile:

George lucas said it best, I do these movies for me not for the fans.

Sounds terrible but its life.

agreed!

how ever i think you are a much better person than Mr. Lucas :cool:

LOL thanks…

fear not…i have not stopped working on Canis Mors. Just recovering. I was hospitalized a week with pneumonia and I have found some awesome inspiration which is going to make some great writing…ill update when i have updates!

holy smoke!!! i am glade that you are better, my girlfriend has a cold a hay fever, and thinks she’s dying. :sigh:

its nasty nasty stuff!!

Finally…an update…this is what i was working on for the past few weeks…inbetween work, life and cases, I haven’t had much time to sit down long enough and work on the story but here is your update lol, as promised a few weeks ago…hopefully its good. Lemme know what you think.

(yes this is directly after the last part i posted so i didn’t skip out on ya)

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“This is the Sherriff’s office?” Peter gawked, his jaw practically hitting the floor, dumb shock crossing his oddly handsome features as Egon pulled the Ecto-1 into a parking space and shifted the ambulance into park.

The building in front of them was two stories tall, made of the standard red brick that all government buildings seem to be made of. The ground floor windows to the right back quarter of the building were lined with thick black iron bars; they were painted a high gloss black to make it look like tempered steel, but no paint job could disguise the thickness of the metal or hide its strength.

They were bolted deep into the brick and mortar, and it was made clear that even though this was as small town sheriff’s office, the town meant business.

The second story apparently was office space and living quarters for officers pulling all night shifts. The windows up top were not barred but Peter could tell that they did have extra strength wire woven through the glass.

The building’s appearance, however, was aged, and faded, water and weather worn, as if it had withstood the tests of time and was only now holding up by the thin looking cement between the brinks. The parking lot was paved, and it too had a faded look; it was apparently a dirty brown during the day but the storm and pounding rains had washed away the dirt, leaving the lot a deep velvet jet black, and covered in a good half an inch of rain water.

On the right hand side of the entrance door, four cruisers sat lined up, all dark, their engines and lights off, sitting like relics. All of them appeared to be aging Ford Crown Victoria’s, white with dual green stripes alongside the car doors, with the town’s double eagle and pine tree emblem and the words NEWCOMB SHERRIFF’S OFFICE curving up under the emblem and along the right and left rear fenders the words “ To Protect and Serve” were emblazoned in golden curving strip.

Only one light burned in the entire building and that was in an office on the ground floor, where Peter only hoped the sheriff, whom he also hoped was not a cannibalistic shotgun toting madman, was waiting for them.

Peter had taken the time from the drive from the convenience store, while crunching on powered sugar donuts and semi flat Coke, he had Ray go over the details with him about the case that he had missed out on while snoozing on the drive up.

Having Ray nearly eaten by Fido was not something to take lightly. Most of the case could be summed up as simply missing persons…if it weren’t for the sightings of those footprints and weird dog monster.

Even after seeing the unnatural every day for the last four years, Peter was still a natural skeptic, but tonight had made a believer out of him. There was something dark in the woods in Newcomb and it took humans. Looking out the Ecto-1’s windows, through the rain streaked glass, watching the drops of water run in rivulets as they fell from the tumultuous sky, Peter couldn’t help the creeping notion that they were being watched.

He began to feel the ■■■■■■■ creep into his nerves and to combat it, he tried to focus on something else. Turning away from the windows, he looked up at Egon, who sat behind the wheel, not saying anything; Egon was normally not a fan of letting the engine idle, as it wasted gas and gas was expensive when it came out of petty cash.

Also, it was unnatural for Egon to zone out like he was currently, just staring ahead through the windshield, his blonde hair pompadour just barely scraping the roof of the old car. Peter became acutely aware that everyone in the car was looking at Egon.

Then Peter really looked at Egon.

Something was wrong.

Egon’s hands were on the wheel, but he was not just holding the wheel, no, he was clenching it hard enough for his knuckles to turn white and in the rearview mirror, Peter saw that behind his round red glasses, Egon’s blue eyes were unfocused, glazed over. Egon’s breathing was shallow and quick and a cold sweat had broken out on his forehead.

It was completely normal for Egon, many times during the day, to zone out. During these periods, he would be intently focused on his task at hand, whether it was working some ungodly complex equation, fiddling with some new and probably extremely explosive piece of equipment he and Ray had cooked up or deeply buried in research.

It was not normal, however, for him to look like he was about to pass out.

Winston and Ray had noticed it as well and quickly, Peter reached out and shook Egon gently by the shoulder. “Hey, Egon old buddy, are you with us?”

No response. Peter shook him harder. Egon’s arms felt like tensed steel, rigid and unmoving. Winston tapped him on the shoulder. “Egon?”

Worry crossed Ray’s boyish features and he reached across the front seat and snapped his fingers in Egon’s face. “Egon?”

Suddenly Egon snapped out of his daze and looked around, his eyes coming instantly into focus, relaxing his grip on the wheel. “Oh, sorry. What?”

Peter felt relief wash over him and he could see it in the other two Ghostbusters as well.

“You worried us there for a minute. We thought you had a gran mal seizure or something,” Peter said, letting his friend’s arm go and settling back into his seat.

“No, I’m fine, really. It’s nothing. “Egon said, and suddenly he was his old self again, as if the events of the last half a minute or so had never occurred.

Ray was about to inquire further, and press him for details, but Egon cut him off. “Looks like this is the place. Let’s get our gear and head inside. I don’t want to go anywhere unarmed after what happened,” and with that, Egon killed the engine and the lights, pocketed the keys and opened the door to the driving slashing rain and shut it just as fast, heading into the near gale force storm.

Peter watched dumbfounded.

“Like the man says, out we go,” he said, reaching for the door handle, and stepping out into the downpour. He was instantly soaked and his uniform didn’t stop the water one bit. “Should’ve brought my swim trunks…” he grumbled under his breath and ran with the other four men to the back of the ambulance, where Egon already had the rear hatch door open and swung wide, the proton pack rack slid out and unfastened. Each man grabbed their pack, a PKE meter, their flashlights, traps and two-way radios.

Once everyone had gotten suited up and Egon felt they were as ready as they could be, he slammed the door and made sure it was shut and without preamble he and the other four Ghostbusters bolted across the parking lot through the storm and made for the station.

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*“…………Over time I’ve come to feel

That everything must come apart it seems

From the little child to the man of power

From the beggar to the angel of my dreams

From the thinnest thread we are sewn together

From the finest string we dangle over time

From the highest wire do we walk through fire

Should our balance ever falter

Should our steps be unaligned……..

…………….shared each other’s sins….

……We all have dreams and nightmares….”

                      -----Oingo Boingo, Flesh and Blood.*</I>

The sky over the old Simmons house was just as dark and roiling as it was at the police station over in town, but there was something different about it.

A faint red glow began to pulsate and pervade the clouds above and around the property and scarlet lighting flared, hissing in the rain, leaving behind the faint stench of sulphur and if one listened hard enough, the thunder from these bolts were laced with the most whispered of screams and wails of agony, which came as fast as the hellish lightning that spawned them and rolled away, fading like the last waves of the ocean on a summer’s eve.

The old garage and the Buick that sat under the tarp did not care that just above the house, the sky was being ripped apart, as if giving birth to some fiend, and if it had had ears, it would have heard the earth scream as the house itself took on the red glow that had turned the storm clouds to blood; the light flowed and ebbed like the pulse of a living creature and then the house began to…change.

At first the change was imperceptible, but quickly it progressed. The wood itself seemed to warp and bend, and finally, the boards that made up the walls came alive, bucking off of their wood supports, the nails melting and turning to slag. The boards bent and snarled, writhing like snakes on a grill, and they seemed to hiss.

The air pressure began to increase and the air became thick, hard to breathe and if you had been standing there, it would have felt like you were walking through quicksand.

All around, the scream of the lighting, the roar of the natural thunder, the blood-red light that bathed everything and the hiss of the mutilated boards filled the world with sound, and nearly as soon as it began, the sound, all sound, stopped as if someone had shut off the volume. Around the glowing land and house, animals, deer and raccoons, birds and rats began to flee, fleeing for their lives, bounding away in leaps, never looking back as the pressure built and built.

The earth heaved and swelled, and finally it cracked, and that fissue spread, streaking towards the suddenly still house, its boards frozen in mid movement and within the span of a millisecond, the fissure hit the house and went under it and then the house seemed to breathe in, all the boards and windows, unnaturally alive as they were, bent inward, as if some underground giant had taken a deep breath, a sleepy yawn. Around the house, the red lighting flashed and sparked soundlessly.

In one terrible second, the house exploded from the very foundations, ripped apart in a violent outward explosion as the pressure wave that had been building finally broke, and above the sky again exploded with sound, with every sound coming back at once, in a single astounding scream of sheer force, boards and glass shattered like toothpicks and a fireball of red energy burst forth from the broken earth, as the house’s remains flew through the air, nothing so much as blackened dead timbers now, landing yards away, the thumps and tinkling of the glass and walls and boards lost in titanic surge of churning energy that now ripped from gaping hole that used to be the basement and joined the sky.

The sky seemed to open and drink the energy and for a moment, it flowed like ■■■■■■ water, filling the clouds and the lightning converged on a single spot in front of the ripped open foundation and with a single blinding flash, seared into the earth and then as suddenly as the unnatural storm began, it faded, leaving behind a smoking ruin of old man Simmons house and also leaving behind something else and only the blue white sheering of lighting and the low grumble of natural thunder provided any sound.

Otherwise, it was as silent as a tomb.

A shadowy figure stood where the lighting had struck. For a moment, it did nothing, and simply stood there. Then it outstretched its arms, and its feminine form began to shift, to melt and change.

The body elongated, the legs became more powerful, the arms lengthened and the fingers turned into wicked ones tipped in long black claws.

The chest barreled and shifted into a more masculine one, and finally all traces of the woman that used to be Janine Melnitz was gone as the head buckled in and then punched out into a wolf’s terrible snout lined with fangs, with black gums and a forked tongue flicked in and out, sniffing the air and dark gray fur sprouted and finally covered the creatures entire body in a silvery sheen.

Dark tiger-stripe markings came in and the ears stretched into almost horn like organs, ragged and ripped and the eyes deepened in their sockets.

The skin and flesh receded from the tip of the muzzle with the nose would have been, leaving only blackened bone, an open hole, horrid and gaping, from which tendrils of steam trickled and finally, the eyes opened and there, it was as if hell itself had vomited up its sinners and malice and cruelty and deception, all its cunning and dark intelligence, and most of all, its ancient unwavering knowing evil.

A deep red light shimmered in the sclera and the pupils were a deep black with yellow pupils.

Standing over seven feet in height, this canid monstrosity raised its right arm and snapped its ghoulishly long fingers once. Instantly its naked body was suddenly clothed in tattered ankle length black robes with a voluminous hood that raised of its own accord to cover the being’s head and cast all but the tip of its smoking snout in darkness and shadow, leaving only the sick yellow and black and red eyes to peer out like dying stars.

It lowered its arm and then it spoke, its voice sounding as if it had swallowed gravel, rasping and slightly metallic as if from disuse. It had a terrible timber to it, as if it were death itself speaking. It spoke, in English, having ripped the language from the woman’s mind, its words slow and halting.

“Guards of Irkalla, come to me, consumere de mors, attend me, Negral of Arali.”

It waited.

It did not know time as mortals did and felt no rush. It had waited over four thousand years; a few more moments were nothing.

There, in the darkness, inky black shapes began to slink from the forest’s edge, low to the ground, and predatory, they stalked, their heads lowered and their powerful bodies moving silently, their blazing red eyes filled with an animal hunger not of this earth.

One

Two

Three

Four….

Yes, they were all here. Four hellish hounds stalked out of the woods, leaving burning sizzling tracks in their wake, their jaws dripping blue acidic slime, their long tails whipping and an intelligent horrid gleam in their gaze. As a pack, the hellhounds, the eaters of the dead, circled the demonic wolf-apparition and stood at attention, making sickening laughing growls in their throats, their eyes rolling as their walked in tight circle around their master.

For a moment, the demon seemed to take pleasure in his soldiers, watching them and then finally he spoke again.

“My children, follow me. We have much work to do and we must begin. We must create the Portcullis then we build our army and lay waste to this mortal plane, and finally bring Irkalla out of the damnations of hell and here, where we will live forever, as we should have from the beginning, with unlimited souls to reap and to shape.”

The savage hounds parted their circle, letting the demon walk out of them, and it strode across the scorched earth, smiling to itself a sharks smile as it stepped effortlessly over the fissure in the earth that had buckled the foundation and split an earth made ramp down into the depths of what used to be the basement of the Simmons house.

Mounting this ramp, the demon in black moved like black water down, down, and he was followed by his hounds, deeper into the now gaping hole that led below the basement, into the Mounds, the mounds that, years ago, Simmons never knew he was building over. The demon walked past the shattered brick and earth and into a gaping wound in the earth.

The hole was more like a tunnel that sloped downwards, into a cave like space. The path wound down farther and farther; how far, it did not matter to the demon for every step was a step closer to the acquisition of the souls he hungered for, longed for, tasted every minute of the four thousand years of his imprisonment.

He barely looked at the walls, which were lined with skulls and bodies embedded into the earth and finally he vanished in the shadows and the hounds moved to follow but the demon held up a hand.

Speaking from the shadows, with only its hellish eyes visible, it spoke to its children.

“No. You have work to do. There are mortals who pose a threat to our plans. This vessel has shown me, albeit unwillingly, the truth of the danger they represent. They could undo everything we will work for,” it paused and reached out its hands, and the eyes of the hounds flared as something imperceptible flooded their predators brains, “find these mortals and kill them. Kill them all. Bring me their souls. You know now where to find them. Do not rest, do not stop, do not show mercy.”

The sick yellow eyes vanished into the darkness of the cavern and turned away, as the hounds, their sickening nearly hyena like growls became more frenzied as they turned and ran galloping slowly at first back up the ramp and out, back into the forest, and then loping, their long legs pumping, heads low and jaws open, with all the dark speed in their bodies, back to Newcomb.

Intense. The description of the storm was very flavorful. I can’t seem to find it in me to do descriptions like that very often.

I’m interested in seeing why Egon had his moment of spazzing out. A backlash from his true love being taken over by a demonic dog entity, perhaps?

Well done.

:slight_smile:

Partially correct about the Egon’s spaz moment, but there is also something more which I’ll explore later in the story that caused it, (you just like those Egon/Janine moments dont ya? LOL) and thanks for the compliments about the storm…its hard to describe a natural storm that turns into something like that…i could see it happening but to describe it with words is difficult because i wanted it to be fluid and dynamic and make you feel like you could be there.

Anything else you like/didnt like/need more exposition on? I love feedback..makes the whole process worth it, especially when you can learn from more experienced fan fiction writers in the community.

My favorite part of the update was the scenes with the hounds and Nembron…

…Dare I post the character sheet i have written up for him with the others?

considers while he works at work with customers…

:cool:


The Ghostbusters entered the station through the front door, which was surprisingly enough, unlocked, and were led deeper into the building, past a reception desk and through a smaller back door, led by a skinny deputy who looked more at home in front of an Atari than with a badge and a gun. Winston supposed that in a town this small, you could afford to leave the doors open.

He remembered as he walked, going back to his childhood in the mean streets of New York, the gangs and the welfare housing. He remembered that leaving a door unlocked there was inviting trouble. His mother Lucille would never fail each night to double check the doors and windows in each room in the old run down brownstone that served as the Zeddemore residence.

 Lost in his own thoughts, Winston let his legs do the walking for him, and let his minder wander. It was best to let your nerves settle before handling any type of stressful job; he had learned that the hard way in the Marines.

Although it was a particularly nasty memory he never let it drag him down, though even now, almost three years later, it stung. Winston had started service after graduating from high school with honors into the Marine Corp.

He worked his way up the ranks and finally took an interest in flying and became an ace helicopter pilot, specializing in combat choppers and later, was trained and got his degree as an engineer, applying the skills he learned as a pilot and his thirst for knowledge as part of his days in the electronic warfare division, testing new and improved ways to kill the enemy.

Winston never saw live combat, but he had taken the training seriously and had become a true prodigy with the assault rifle and anything mechanical he laid his hands on…but all of that did him no good when the cards were played out and fate dealt him a hand.

It was a live fire exercise that did it; three years ago he was living well in the barracks at the air force base, and one evening there was a test run of a new attack copter, one that Winston himself had helped design, specifically the navigation and response packages and thus had been given the honor of first test flight and the first test fire on the range of the copters new advanced delivery system.

His best friend at the time, a man named Saul Johnson, a white kid from east Brooklyn, was to fly with him.

Everything had went fine. The copter flew like a dream but it was the dry fire test that went wrong.

He and Saul had been hovering and already nervous, he felt that something was wrong but pressed on anyway and activate the lock on mechanism of the right missile bank.

Instantly, alarms began to flash and scream for attention and the copter wobbled, its tail dipping low and sparks flew from the missile locking clamps and without warning, the tail slammed into the ground, obliterating the rear stabilizers in a ball of fire, sending metal and shrapnel careening, and with a roar, the chopper came down, slamming violent into the ground in a crumpled heap.

A fire broke out in the control boards behind Saul, hiding him in a cascade of sparks; the proto-type navigation system Winston had designed had short circuited, and Saul, being strapped down in restraints, had no where to go in the cramped co-pilots chair. Behind him, Winston could hear Saul struggling, and coughing and then finally, screaming as the flames began to lick his skin.

The destroyed rear of the chopper had burst into flame and the flames were licking their way towards the fuel tanks, and the heat in the cockpit became finally unbearable. Shaken and bruised by the crash, which luckily had not been of too great a height, Winston instantly removed his flight helmet and tore of his restraints.

Smoke had began to billow in the cockpit; Coughing, he used his helmet to smash the cracked glass panes out of the canopy. Not wasting any time, he drug his pinned legs out from under the crushed control board, nearly screaming in agony as a gash was ripped open from his tight to his knee cap.

Kicking the latches out, he finally managed to hit the escape level, blowing the cockpit canopy clear of the vehicle. He could see the other Marines running across the field to help, but he knew that they would come too late. At last on his feet, Winston remembered reaching into the back, fighting the flames and smoke from the now burning chopper to try and reach Saul.

Desperation had driven his arms and given them strength and he prayed to God that he wasn’t going to be too late, to not let his best friend die from something he had helped create.

Fumbling on the buckles, Winston had finally managed to free Saul’s now limp body and with a heave, yanked his badly burned friend from the chopper, smelling the acrid tang of burning fuel, scorched metal and the horrid sick sweet smell of burnt flesh. Falling to the ground with Saul’s dead weight against him, Winston had forced himself to move, dragging both of them across the field, as far as he could get from the chopper.

Even before he pulled Saul’s helmet from his ruined face, Winston knew it was too late. He knew that his friend was gone and that he was to blame.

He left the Marine’s shortly after, and despite the fact that he felt that he was at fault, he was given an honorable discharge. He had spent the next few weeks with his pastor and at home with his mother and his father, Charles “Charlie” Zeddemore.

For a time, he worked with Charlie as a construction worker, spending his days building and creating, running on the thin i-beams and supervising the work. Eventually though, Winston felt he needed to start over and then, by chance he caught an ad in the paper for “paranormal investigator and eliminator sought for new company in Tribecca…salary negotiable; belief in paranormal activity is a must. Must be willing to work long hours and travel. Room and board provided. Living will preferred. Call 554-4618.”

He had responded to the add, desperate for a new start and a better job than just slinging bricks on mortar, and he remembered that since that fateful day at the firehouse with Janine, his life had never been the same and now that he thought about it, he was happy just where he was.

Focusing on the job at hand, he hefted his proton pack and adjusted the straps (the things weighed close to fifty pounds), and followed Ray through an office door with the nameplate that read “Special Investigator J. Bassle” on it bolted to the door in gold brass at eye level. The memos and paper deposit box outside the door was full and probably each file folder was its own personal collection of hell.

Other than the deputy who looked at the four men and their odd equipment with a look of fearful trepidation as if they would explode (Egon’s devices had a way of being extremely explosive, despite his best intentions so it could be a real risk), the halls were empty.

No other offices were open or lit and despite the florescent lights overhead, the whole building felt starkly dead and dull. With a nod, the deputy left the men in the office and went back to the reception desk that served as a switchboard.

Upon entering the office, Winston saw that it was neat, cleaned and painfully organized. Three file cabinets lined the back wall and a large mahogany desk sat dead center with a large leather chair in front of it and a surprisingly beautiful woman sitting behind it.

Winston felt his breath catch, and across from him, Peter’s did as well. She was a finely built example of the feminine form, her arms and legs tapering gently, into fine feet and hands with slender elegant fingers.

Her face was that of an angel, with ice blue eyes and raven dark hair, straight and sleek, pulled professionally back in a tight pony tail which then hung loosely down her back.

Her eyes were situated behind thin plastic glasses that only made them more beautiful and gave her an air at once of almost painful professional severity but also an air of divine precious wisdom and hidden wonder.

She was dressed in white slacks with a dark blazer and white jacket. Her feet were clad in the traditional loafers and Winston would almost put a bet on it that Peter had also noticed she did not have a wedding band.

“Hello…” Peter said, breathless.

Egon rolled his eyes and Ray just stood there, his face bright red. Winston straightened up and made sure his uniform was straight.

After all, they had a business to run and it was best to look professional. Winston suddenly cringed as Peter leaned forward, casually dropping onto his forearms, leaving across the desk and nearly got nose to nose with the woman.

“Say, miss, could you call Dr. Bassle? And while you’re at it, why don’t you clear a few days off the good doc’s schedule? I know a great uptown restaurant…” he said, his voice dropping low in a conspiratorial tone, and he apparently was turning on the full Venkman charm, despite the fact that he and the rest of the Ghostbusters were still drenched and that he was dripping water onto the woman’s desk and papers.

Peter apparently hadn’t noticed the name plate on the desk or the woman’s ID badge fixed on her upper left breast of her jacket.

Or maybe he had noticed, just not the badge…

Winston, Egon and Ray however, clearly noted it and Winston moved in to save Peter from a flogging.

“Peter?”

Peter ignored him, pressing his luck. “You know, as one of the co-founders of the nation’s first paranormal eliminations companies, I’m sure I could get us the best vacation spots on several different dimensional planes and—“

The woman stopped typing on her computer and was simply staring at Peter, her blue eyes shooting daggers at him, and Peter went on oblivious.

Winston moved closer. “Peter!” he whispered through a forced smile.

Ray finally reached out and tapped him on the shoulder. “Uh, Peter?”

Turning around to face his co-founder, Peter rounded on him. “Yes, Ray? Is this your way of saying you want a conference? You really should work on—“

Ray pointed to the desk’s name plate. Peter’s eyes dropped to where Ray was pointing surreptitiously, and felt his face flush hot with embarrassment. Swallowing his pride, he looked at the name of the woman on her badge and felt his self-confidence drop to somewhere in the immediate vicinity of his feet.

Without a word, the woman rose to her full height of just over five foot seven, and faced Peter down with an icy stare that showed she was clearly not buying any of his womanizing and furthermore, didn’t appreciate him making a mess of her desk.

“I am Dr. Bassle, forensic investigator and head of special crimes in Newcomb,” she stated, reading Peter’s name tag quickly, “Dr. Venkman,” she said, her voice, normally like an angel’s harp was sharply directed to sting Peter with every bit of venom she could muster.

Peter instantly jerked back, his demeanor going from a charmer to a professional in less than half a second as he straightened his uniform and wiped the rainwater from his naturally messy hair, flinging droplets of it the framed diplomas on the wall behind him.

Dr. Bassle’s eyebrows reached the middle of her forehead and disdain crossed her features as she noticed and moved out from behind her desk, taking in the four men in the proton packs, ghost traps and other investigating equipment, clearly having second thoughts about calling them in the first place.

“Don’t mind him,” Ray said, stepping in front of Peter before he could do more damage. He wiped his hand on his uniform, making sure it was as dry as he could get it and extended it to Bassle, who took it firmly and shook it with the grace of queen yet with the strength of someone who could knock your lights out if she wanted to, “ I’m Dr. Ray Stantz, and this is Dr. Spengler, “ he continued, pointing to each member in turn, “ Dr. Venkman and Winston Zeddemore. We’re the Ghostbusters.”

Letting go of his hand, Bassle moved around the four men and out the office door, holding it wide “Gentleman, if you could please follow me, I think we would all be more comfortable in the lounge…there is more space and you look you all could use some time to dry out.”

“Lead the way then, “ Ray said, trying to throw professional enthusiasm into his voice while glaring at Peter who was sheepishly the last one out the door, pausing only to wipe the water from the diploma’s frame, and then rushing to catch up down the hall with the others and into the lounge.

Okay. This time I have to nitpick a little…

In the previous chapter, Venkman’s thoughts reference “Even after seeing the unnatural every day for the last four years” while in this one it suggests Winston’s helicopter accident was three years before, and he left the Marines, worked in construction for a while, and then joined the Ghostbusters. Those don’t quite seem to match up to me at first glance..

And this is a bigger one: “his father, Charles ‘Charlie’ Zeddemore” Charlie is the (unofficial) name of Venkman’s father, while Winston’s dad is Edward “Big Ed” Zeddemore, as established in “The Brooklyn Triangle”.

Other than that, some neat development of Winston’s background and a classicly-flaovred moment of Venkman being, well, Venkman.

Thank God you saw that. I didn’t notice it. I was looking for the episode of Brooklyn Triangle and found it on youtube and re-watched it and that is a goof on my part (thank you for nitpicking! I can’t believe I missed that! I’ve been watching every episode and reading everything I can get my hands on and missed that! DOH! I have corrected this and a few other continuity goofs in the master copy and they will be fixed with the story is finally put out as a whole piece).

And your right. My time frame for this story is between “Adventures of Slime and Space” and “Ragnarok and Roll”, which is august 1987 (im using the air dates of the episodes as a rough time line, moving around certain episodes like the holiday themed ones to their appropriate spots that way I have some sense of cohrency) and I should have caught that flub up. Good catch and thanks as always for helping keep my head straight!!

I know some may not like my history of Winston (like my new history of the Ecto-1) so I wanted to explain how and why I did what I did for him and look at Dr. Bassle a bit more closely…

As for Winston’s background, I wanted to make an amalgam of his days in the Marine’s (which was hinted at in RGB, as was his past working the construction with his father. However, it was also said that he was out of the service for only a few weeks before he answered the ad for the ghostbusters and that he was trained in electronic countermeasures and may be a certified in electronics in some way. I like Winston and in the RGB and the movies he is given the most subtle development and I wanted to explore Winston a bit because we know a ton about the other Ghostbusters and much about Winston is really unknown.

I wanted to give him a reason for leaving a well paying position in the marines and then i needed to fit that in with the claim that he was a construction worker in “GB in Paris,” hence I created Saul and the accident with the chopper (which also explains why he drives most of the time I hope because of his training and why he such a damn good shot with the throwers ).

“I love this town!!!”—Winston

Dr. Joe Bassle…she is a new character for me in my continuity. I’ve been messing around with a few created characters for Ghostbusters for a while and I’m pulling some from my scribbles for this story. I know that by this point in the continuity I’m working on establishing as a new one, that Dana and Peter have been plit up for about just under a year, with Dana having left the States with the musician from the first movie, making a temporary stay in Europe, and that I did not want to create a Dana Barett clone. Joe is short for Josephine, which as you saw, Peter learned a tad to late…

A few quick facts about Joe…

she is 27 years old and lives alone in a small home in upper Newcomb that her father left her before he died.

She was raised Protestant, but is lapsed and has lost her faith in the unknown and the supernatural.

She does not like situations where she does not understand or can explain away as a consequence.

…and she may have ties to a certain Ghostbuster …

The lounge was actually a moderately sized room, with beige walls and a white runner. The far wall facing the parking lot had a large window covered with a blind, but you could see out of it anyway, the skies were still pitch black and the storm was lashing the building, as if it were a desperate animal trying to get in. The left wall was lined with cabinets (which were white and surgical green) on top of which sat a microwave, a sink, various foodstuffs that were mostly dried goods, such as potato chips and a large box of Twinkies.

The refrigerator sat and a hummed idly; the thing was ancient, probably ten to fifteen years old and was a faded brown. Dears had made better in their time, and Ray knew it because he and Slimer had gone shopping for a new fridge after Slimer shorted out the one in the kitchen at home .

He followed Egon into the lounge and at last, Dr. Bassle motioned the men to sit down on the couches situated under the windows, in front of the television. Ray’s shoulders were burning from the heavy proton pack and he was all too ready for a seat.

He moved over the sofa on the left, a sagging brown and yellow checked one, and opened the buckle on the straps on the proton pack, and finally sliding it to the floor, where he propped it against the sofa; Ray moved his shoulders and popped the right one.

Around him, the other Ghostbusters did the same, with Peter taking the seat in the recliner directly under the window. Bassle moved to the refrigerator, and dug around inside, eventually coming out with five Coke’s, their red cans glistening with moisture, evident to how cold they were.

Somehow, the woman was talented enough to juggle the drinks and the box of Twinkies as she came back over to the men and passed out the drinks and sat the Twinkies on the coffee table.

“I’m sorry for the way I was earlier…This case has really gotten to me. Please, take these and help yourselves. I know it was a long trip from Manhattan.” She said, taking a seat next to Winston, snapping open her Coke and taking a drink. Peter scooted his proton pack to the left of his seat and was too busy giving Dr. Bassle the once over with his eyes.

Apparently the good lady was also just as comfortable out of the office as she was in it….and speaking of out of things, Peter had a hard time not imagining her out of those clothes and into something more…

Egon sat to his right, in the other recliner; he had sat the PKE meter from his belt onto the coffee table. When this drew eyebrows, he simply stated “ Just a precaution. We don’t want a repeat of the gas station,” he said, switching the meter on. The wings on it stayed mercifully down and unlit. The sine wave and frequency graph on the screen was also thankfully, flat.

Bassle turned to face Egon, concern crossing her delicate features. “Incident?”

Ray quickly offered an explanation, sitting forward, taking a Twinkie out of the box.

“It was nothing really. It was simple class six canine corporeal entity. Nothing to be alarmed about.”

“ You squealed like a girl, Ray.” Peter reminded him.

“Well, it had big teeth, and I—“

Bassle looked to them both, confused. “ I’m sorry, I don’t understand what you are talking about.”

Winston shook his head and was thankful when Egon took over before Ray or Peter embarrassed the team anymore.

“Sorry about those two, Miss Bassle. Let me explain. We ran into something that matched the description of the entity that has been terrorizing the town, at a local gas station just outside the city—“

“Yeah, it almost made a meal of Ray, here.” Winston added.

Across the table, Ray shrugged as if to say, What is one to do?

“Luckily, I saved the day and stopped Ray from becoming an oversize chew toy for the ecto-plasmic puppy.” Peter shot in quickly, leaning in towards Bassle, who cringed away.

“Can you tell us a bit more about what has been going on? The case file is detailed but, it’s always good to hear it from a person,” Winston said as Egon slipped a Twinkie out of the box.

“Well, Dr. Zeddemore,” Bassle began, placing her Coke on the coffee table; Winston was going to correct her but let it go for now, “ it began in June, of ’85. The first person to be taken was John Cable, a local mechanic. He had stopped along the side of the road back on Route 22, towards Tahawus, near the old the Simmons place. Apparently, he had a flat and he stopped to change it. We found his tools where he dropped them…most of them were charred and had odd marks, like…well..almost like they had been..chewed.”

Ray’s eyes went wide. It HAD been closer than he thought….especially if it was the same entity…apparently, tempered steel was no match for the bite force of their jaws. “Well, at least they behave like dogs….live ones that is…” Peter said.

“Yeah that’s totally a relief, Peter.” Winston rolled his eyes. “ You should bring a giant newspaper.”

“Please go on,” Egon asked, glaring through his glasses at his teammates.

“His car was just sitting there…with its lights flashing and this weird smell…like death…like something…” shaking her head, Bassle moved on. “ Then there was Laura Vaughan, September, same year. She was just twenty-two…She lived just down Route 22, off of the old Farmer’s Road. She had been walking home apparently, and she was taken….we found her backpack and her jacket…both were torn apart and the fabric was singed and burned in places…there were these funny glowing blue-black hairs everywhere.”

Ah. Evidence. Egon perked up “Did you get the hair’s tested?”

Bassle looked at him as if he asked the silliest question possible. “Of course we did.”

Ray took a swig from his Coke. “What did you find?”

“That the hairs were baseline canine, but also had a faint trace of human DNA and a low level of some kind of strange radiation…”

“Cerenkov radiation..” Egon said.”

Bassle stopped, “What?”

“Cerenkov radiation.. It’s electromagnetic radiation that’s emitted when a charged particle, passes through an insulator at a speed greater than the speed of light.” Egon explained.

Winston translated.“Yeah, it’s what makes nuclear reactors have the blue glow to them…it was named after nuclear scientist Pavel Čerenkov.”

Bassle took another drink from her Coke; clearly the memories of the investigations and facing the families of the taken, seeing their fear and sorrow, and being unable to offer any explanation was not something she took easily.

“Oh. Well, after that was probably the worst attack, on a boy, Danny Southmont. He and his friends, Mark and Brent were hanging around the old Tahawus mining town. Its actually supposed to be off limits…dangerous old structures and there are rumors of an open mine shaft…According to his friend, he was dragged off by a giant black hound…Mark and Brent ran as far as they could away from the old town, right along County Road 25 and went to a neighbor, who called us. We were only able to find his clothes, burnt and again, covered in the same blue-black hairs. These were glowing a faint blue..must have been that radiation you were talking about.”

“Those were the boys who were checked into the nut—er, I mean hospital, right?” Peter asked.

Shooting him a nasty look, Bassle nodded. “Yes.”

Sighing, Dr. Bassle finished her story. “ Then of course, the reason why we called you was Charlie Porter…He was a repo man for Sherman’s Discount Auto…he had went out to the Simmons home to do a repossession of a car that Mr. Simmons had been making payments on….we found the tracks, burned into the earth, the hairs, that black gunk that I had Lieutenant Frump bring you, and of course we found Porter’s tow truck…the windshield and windows shattered, the upholstery burned and drag marks in the dirt that just ended….We never did find his body.”

“That’s the second time you’ve mentioned this Simmons. Who is he?” Ray asked, finishing his Coke.

Bassle smiled for the first time since they had met as if the memory of Mr. Simmons was a fond one.

“Mr. Simmons used to be a professor at Manhattan university. He was an archaeologist…he was especially interested in Middle-Eastern cultures…He had bought an old track of land in the middle of the woods just outside of Tahawus.” Bassle swallowed the last of her Coke and set the empty can on the table with a neat clink.

“There was an old farm house there and he took the time to rebuild it and fix it up decently….He used to be so nice to me when he would come into town. I remember he would tell us stories and myths from all over the world when I was a little girl.”

“Used to be? What happened to him?” Winston asked, picking up on the past tense.

“Well, when he first moved here, I was about six or seven. He would always come into town for groceries and supplies. He would take me and my brother over to the old ice cream parlor and buy us sundaes and keep us busy while my mother did her shopping. He would always tell us stories, mostly myths…like the creation myth from Babylon….about Tiamat and Marduk…how Marduk used Tiamat to make the world…But,” Bassle paused, not noticing the look that Ghostbusters gave each other when she mentioned Tiamat and Marduk, her voice dropping, her face darkening “ he began to change as we got older. He didn’t come to town as much and finally, one day he stopped telling us his stories, and then we rarely saw him come into town…Even recently, when I would see him in town, he wouldn’t speak to me …Then about three weeks ago, he vanished all together. We wouldn’t have known about it if it hadn’t been for that old miser Sherman sending Porter up there to repo the car that Simmons drove…an old Buick Regal…apparently, he had missed a payment.”

Egon bit the end off of his Twinkie. “Did he have any knowledge of the occult? I mean,” he chewed, “ besides the history or the anthropology?”

Bassle shook her head. “ I wouldn’t know. But I remember one time that my family went over to his house for dinner, he showed us his collection of artifacts he had recovered through the years…and there were some fairly strange things..idols, amulets, the like.”

“Hmmm,” was his only reply.

For a moment, no one said anything.

Outside the storm raged.

The wind had picked up. Lightning speared the night, as if trying to kill it, coming through the openings in the blind to cast weird shadows on the walls.

Rain came down in driving sheets.

Shadows were moving outside too, but not because of the wind. They moved independently, like wolves on the hunt, low to the ground and formless, yet somehow suggesting a body.

Making no sound, these shadows, all four of them, stalked closer to the station, keeping clear of the lights, surrounding Ecto-1, moving forward towards the deeper shadows along the side of the building that wasn’t lit….towards the lounge.

In the lounge, as the Ghostbusters and Dr. Bassle continued talking, no one noticed that the PKE meter’s display changed. The previously flat-lined sine wave began to flux, moving slowly, and the frequency spectrum graph display began to spike, not much, but slowly jumping up. The antennae did not move out from their housing.

“….So what do you think this is?” Bassle said, crossing her arms.

Ray finished his Twinkie. “Well, it’s hard to say. We haven’t ever came across anything like this..I mean, we’ve had cases where people have vanished or been taken, but never like this. We need to find out why they are being taken and by what.”

Winston sat forward. “ I think we should check out the Simmons place. I hope he didn’t let anything loose.”

Egon nodded.

“ I agree, I think we should start by checking the house, and going through his papers and collection, to see if we can find a clue about what is going on. Whatever it is, I have a hunch that he is at the center of it.”

Peter said nothing but stood up, stretching. “Well, guys, we never have been good planners. Let’s get going before Noah’s ark makes an appearance out there.” He said, indicating the pouring rain.

“Do you think you could pull the samples of the hair from the evidence room? I’d like to take a look at them.” Egon stated, standing as well. Ray and Winston joined them as Bassle got off the sofa and straightened her clothes. “Certainly. Follow me it’s just down—“

With a tremendous crash of thunder, every light in the station went black, plunging the room into near absolute darkness.

“HEY!” Ray cried, banging his knees on the table.

“What the hell—“ Winston gasped, unable to see his hand in front of his face.

“It must have been the storm…Come on, we use flashlights.” Peter reminded them.

WREEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEP.

A brilliant source of orange-tinted light exploded in the darkness.

“Uh oh.” Ray said, looking down.

On the table the PKE meter had came on, the sine waves and frequency graphs spiking like crazy, the twin antennae had swung up, the indicator lights on the tips flashing yellow in a mad pulsing pattern.

Peter, Winston and Egon all froze looking down at the meter. Egon moved first, picking up the blaring meter, squinting at its display, its orange glow bathing his face and glasses in an eerie light.

“This looks extraordinarily bad.”

Peter didn’t want to hear it. “ What’s bad, Egon? Enlighten me. I can’t stand the suspense.”

“Four ecto-signatures, all class six…There are also trace amounts of Cerenkov radiation fluxes and heavy ionization.”

Ray looked around him, expecting to see the hordes of Hell in the room with them. “Where? I don’t see anything.”

Egon swallowed and gave Ray the bad news.

“Surrounding the building…”

“Oh boy…Switch on.” Ray said, his memory of his encounter with the hellhound all too fresh.

Reaching down, he felt in the dark and found his proton pack. Hefting it up, he put it on, fastening the straps. Reaching over his shoulder, he took the particle thrower off its v-hook and switched on the blaster. The status indicator lights flared red and held steady, showing the pack was ready. The familiar whine built and faded into a low humming that made the filings in his teeth vibrate.

Not again. He wasn’t going to any demon’s chew toy.

Around him, the other Ghostbusters did the same, strapping on their packs, drawing their throwers and activating them. The men took out their lights, standard army issue d-cell angle-heads, and strapped them to their right proton pack strap, switching on their beams. White cones of light lit up the room. Now that they could see, Peter felt somewhat better. “So, what do we do?” he asked, looking around, half expecting to be torn limb from limb.

“ We’ve got to get out of here and into the car.”

“Oh my God!”

“WHAT?!” all four Ghostbusters rounded on Bassle, weapons at the ready.

“Johnny! The deputy at the desk!”

“We’ll get him on our way out,” Egon stated and moved towards the door, using the light on his shoulder to see by.

“Egon, they might have a problem with that.” Peter said, backing up, his face going white with fear.

“What?” Egon turned to Peter and he noticed the other three Ghostbusters and Bassle backing away from him too. “What is the matter?” he asked, completely oblivious, not seeing anything.

Then he heard it.

A deep throated feral growling coming from behind him.

Oh no…

Turning, he found himself staring down a hell hound roughly the size of a wolfhound, only bigger and thicker at the shoulders, and with a nasty snout lined with teeth, and a long sinewy tail, its large paws burning into the floor, and glowing blue slime dripping from its jaws.

It was standing in the doorway, the only way in or out of the lounge, blocking the exit.

Egon moved back, and was brought to a stop when he hit the wall.

“Looks like we’re gonna have to fight our way out of this…” Winston said, taking aim.

“Don’t we always?” Peter replied as another hound joined the first, and a third and a fourth, their terrible eyes glowing like embers in the dark, the lights from the flashlights hitting them, making their horrid shadows dance wildly.

As a pack, the hounds entered the room, with murder in their eyes.

“Keep your head down, “ Ray said, making sure Bassle was clear.

“Shall we take these puppies to the pound?” came Peter’s voice from Egon’s right.

The hounds moved in that instant, clearing the space between the entrance to the Ghostbusters, leaping into the air, their jaws held wide in demonic grins, roaring a scream of death and pain, claws gleaming.

That was all it took. Raising his thrower, Ray gave the order and depressed the trigger stud.

“FIRE!”

Hey guys just an update! I am taking a vacation from writing on this story until after my vacation from work (which is the same week the videogame comes out and my birthday ). I will resume work on it right after that week and for those of you who have read XGB: Exodus, and liked it, I have not abandoned it and will be working on it as well.

here’s to the game and many hours of online ghostbusting with all of you!

see you soon!